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ProfessionalEmailWorkshopLecture3

LECTURE3

THEMESSAGE–GETTOTHEPOINTANDBECONCISE

-Frontloadmostimportantinformationatdocument,paragraphandsentencelevels

-Subjectline–________________________________________________________

-Documentlevel–_____________________________________________________

-Paragraphlevel–_____________________________________________________

-Sentencelevel–______________________________________________________

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-useshorterparagraphsandsentencesifpossibleandknowwhattodoifnotpossible

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Compare:

1.“Whennotifiedtheunilateralterminationwastakingeffect,theemployeerefused

theemployer’sinstructiontoleavetheworkplacebecausetheunionhadnotbeen

notifiedoftheunilateraltermination.”

2.“Theemployeerefusedtheemployer’sinstructiontoleavetheworkplace.There-

fusalwasbecausetheunionhadnotbeennotifiedthattheunilateraltermination

wastakingeffect.”

3.“Theemployeerefusedtheemployer’sinstruction.Therefusaltoleavethework-

placeasinstructedwasbecausetheunionhadnotbeennotifiedoftheunilateral

termination.”

4.“Theemployeerefused.”

-Whenusinglongsentences,rememberusingfrontloadingtechniquesandconsiderbul-

letornumberedliststocreatewhitespace

Compare:

1.“Inordertoreceiveap