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第一节作文（满分15分）逐句改错与分析

1.?Hello,everyone,ImLiHua.ourschoolheldaschoolactivityaboutChinesefood.

-错误：句首“our”应大写为“Our”；“held”时态若描述过去活动正确，但后续若有逻辑连贯性需注意；“aschoolactivity”中“school”重复，可改为“anactivityaboutChinesefoodinourschool”。

-修正：Hello,everyone,ImLiHua.OurschoolheldanactivityaboutChinesefood.

2.?ThereasonforthisactivityistoincreasetheknowledgeforstudentsaboutChinesefood.

-错误：“increaseknowledgefor”搭配错误，应为“increasestudentsknowledgeof”；“theknowledge”冠词冗余。

-修正：ThereasonforthisactivityistoincreasestudentsknowledgeofChinesefood.

3.?YoursoulwillbeproudoftheChineseculture.

-错误：“Yoursoul”表意突兀，可改为“You”；“beproudof”虽正确，但此处可优化为“feelproudof”更自然。

-修正：YouwillfeelproudofChineseculture.

4.?OurFestivalincludeChinesefoodcompitisionandChinesefoodeatingstress.

-错误：“include”应改为第三人称单数“includes”；“compitision”拼写错误为“competition”；“eatingstress”表意错误，推测是“eatingcontest（饮食竞赛）”。

-修正：OurfestivalincludesaChineseFoodCompetitionandaChineseFoodEatingContest.

5.?Youcaneatmanytraditional.Chinesefoodthere.Such,dumpling,noodles,andzong-zithere.

-错误：“traditional”后缺少名词，可改为“traditionalfoods”；“many”修饰可数名词复数，“food”作“食物种类”时可数，故“Chinesefood”改为“Chinesefoods”；“Such”后应接“as”构成“suchas”（例如）；“dumpling”改为复数“dumplings”；重复“there”冗余。

-修正：YoucaneatmanytraditionalChinesefoodsthere,suchasdumplings,noodles,andzongzi.

6.?Everyoneinthereplayedveryhappy,andeveryonewanttohavethisFestivalnextyear.

-错误：“inthere”冗余，删去“in”；“played”是动词，应用副词“happily”修饰；“want”应改为过去式“wanted”（活动是过去发生的）。

-修正：Everyonethereplayedveryhappily,andeveryonewantedtohavethisfestivalagainnextyear.

7.?Ibelieveourschoolwillholdthisfestivalagain.

-错误：“holdthisfestivalagain”中“this”指代前文的“Festival”，但前文未明确命名，可改为“suchafestival”更自然。

-修正：Ibelieveourschoolwillholdsuchafestivalagain.

第二节作文（满分25分）逐句改错与分析

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