2012广州调研作文讲评.pptxVIP

作文讲评2012广州调研考试小作文进步： 1. 信息整合比较好2. 语言表达有提高（长句子）3. 文章连贯性增加存在问题： 审题 （时态）长句的逻辑性词的适当形式、近义词混淆 Step 1： 读题、审题+信息整合主题首届全国中学生“春晚”--- “轮到我们了”组织者一群广州中学生时间2012年1月15日,节目时长180分钟内容学生喜欢的各种节目，如街舞等。特色1.自编、自导、自演； 2.传统节目与新潮节目的结合。目的1.给中学生提供展现才华的机会； 2.让观众更多了解岭南文化。12345一般将来时/一般现在时； 第三人称Step 2: 翻译信息点 Step 3 : 连词成句首届全国中学生“春晚” --- “轮到我们了”（主题）（组织者） 一群广州中学生A group of students from Guangzhou plan/is going to/decide to hold/organize the first National Middle School Students’ Spring Festival Show with the theme of “It’s Our Turn”/whose theme is “It’s Our Turn”/of which the theme is “It’s Our Turn”. The first National Middle School Students’ Spring Festival Show with the theme of “It’s Our Turn”/whose theme is “It’s Our Turn”/of which the theme is “It’s Our Turn” is organized by a group of students from Guangzhou.2012年1月15日… will be held by… on January 15th,2012.2012年1月15日,节目时长180分钟The show will be held on January 15th, 2012 and will last as long as 180 minutes. The show, which will last 180 minutes, will be held on Jan. 15th, 2012. 学生喜欢的各种节目，如街舞等。 There will be various performances the students themselves like/are fond of like/such as/including street dance and acting out plays. Students will give/put on all kinds of performances the students themselves are fond of, like the street dance. The 180-minute-long show will include a great variety of performances the students themselves are keen on, like the street dance.(特色)自编、自导、自演2.传统节目与新潮节目的结合。What makes it special/different is that it is organized, directed and performed all by the students and that it combines both traditional programs and fashionable ones.It is special because …Unlike other shows, the performances, organized, directed and performed by students themselves, are a perfect combination of traditional styles and modern ones.The show is organized, directed and performed by students themselves. Besides, it is combined with traditional styles and modern ones.给中学生提供展现才华的机会； 2.让观众更多了解岭南文化。 According to the organizers, this show aims at