2016届海南省琼中中学高三英语二轮复习---高三下第五次综合考试作文讲评.pptVIP

作文讲评训练 母亲节、父亲节即将来临，为了让父母加强锻炼，保持健康，你打算用攒下的零花钱给他们买一件礼物。请以“A Present for my parents”为题写一篇文章，包括以下内容： 1. 你送的礼物：一张健康俱乐部的贵宾卡 2. 你父母亲的现状。 3. 你送该礼物的原因。 注意： 1．文章应包括以上所有信息； 2．词数100左右。文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。 相关词汇短语 Mother’s Day, Father’s Day, present, VIP card, exercise, keep healthy, health club, get older, my love and thanks, … My father is …, My mother works as …, I want them to do …, because…, … 定语从句，状语从句，非谓语动词作状语或定语，…… 月考作文得分情况分析(Class 1) 最高分 最低分 平均分 16~20分:人 6~10分:人 11~15分:人 1~5分:人 失分原因： 1. 内容要点主次不分； 2. 混淆现状和原因的表达，内容混乱或遗漏要点； 3. 要点里已提到送礼原因，却随意发散显得离题； 4. 缺少过渡词和高级表达。 月考作文得分情况分析(Class 8) 最高分 最低分 平均分 16~20分: 人 6~10分: 人 11~15分: 人 1~5分: 人 0分: 人 失分原因： 1. 内容要点主次不分； 2. 混淆现状和原因的表达，内容混乱或遗漏要点； 3. 要点里已提到送礼原因，却随意发散显得离题； 4. 缺少过渡词和高级表达。 考生作文 A Present for My Parents Mother’s Day and Father’s Day are coming and I want to give my parents a present. It is a VIP card of a health club. My father works hard as a teacher, spending most of his time working with great efforts at school. My mother loves reading and often dives into piles of books, paying no attention to taking exercise. As I grow up, they are getting older. Both of them should exercise more but neither is doing enough. With the health club membership, I hope that they will find time to do more exercise. I want to express my love and thanks to them by giving them the present, which will help them relax themselves in the health club and make more friends there. In this way I am sure they will enjoy better health. 句型仿写训练 1. 我的母亲是一名医生，工作努力，在医院里度过了她大多数的时间。(work as …, spend … doing , 非谓语动词作状语) 2. 我想通过这份礼物来表达我的敬意，它能让你在旅行中放松下来并享受那里的美景。(express … by …, 非限定性定语从句) 1. My mother works hard as a doctor, spending most of her time working in the hospital. 2. I want to express my respect by giving you the present, which will help you relax yourself while traveling and enjoy the beautiful scenery there. Homework Recite the sample composition.