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Part?I?Writing　　标准版　　Doing?Shopping?Online　　With?the?development?of?the?Internet,?shopping?is?no?longer?a?tiring?thing.Just?click?your?mouse?to?choose?the?articles?you?like,?and?the?purchase?is?done.You?don’t?even?have?to?step?out?of?the?room.?It?seems?all?easy?and?quick.　　However,?people’s?opinions?vary?on?this?trend.?Some?believe?that?on?lineshopping?is?time?and?money?saving.?With?plentiful?selection?options,?they?canbuy?whatever?they?like?at?any?time?convenient.?Still?others?insist?thatmis-purchasing?alone?is?annoying?enough,?not?to?mention?the?credibility?of?thesellers?and?the?safety?of?their?accounts.　　In?my?opinion,?the?convenience?and?excitement?of?on?line?shopping?is?beyondall?doubts.?In?the?meantime,?we?must?always?bear?in?mind?that?certain?traps?doexist,?so?we’d?better?make?sure?the?sellers?are?trustworthy?before?buying.?Inaddition,?we?should?also?guard?ourselves?from?the?potential?hackers?who?mightsteal?our?account?information.　　文章点评：　　这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。?本文先对网购热潮进行简介，引出全篇；接着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比；最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰，逻辑严密，行文流畅，用语较为地道。　　下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处：　　1.?文章结构上，能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”（提出问题、分析问题、解决问题）。?但是，以“With?the?development?of?the?Internet”为开首语，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，应该能写出更好的句子。　　2.?微观语言点方面，有些语句稍显啰嗦，比如With?plentiful?selection?options…?简化成With?plentiful?selections…?更好，意思没有丝毫减损，表达力反而增强许多；　　高分版　　Nowadays,?can?we?find?a?person?who?has?not?experienced?online?shopping?Definitely?not.?Online?shopping?is?coming?into?fashion?in?most?of?cities?dueto?the?rapid?development?of?internet?technology.　　Online?shopping?is?welcomed?by?most?people?due?to?various?reasons.?Fromthe?perspective?of?consumer,?it?can?save?some?time?for?people?who?don’t?have?much?spare?time.?Just?click?the?mouse,?they?can?get?whatever?they?want?whilestaying?at?home.?For?the?retailers,?it?can?cut?some?costs?for?those?who?don’thave?much?circulating?funds.?They?don’t?have?to?rent?a?house?and?spend?moneyon?employees?compared?with?the?traditional?trade?mode.?However,?there?are?stillsom