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Writing 书面表达 假如你叫李越，是一名高三学生。今年高中毕业后想去英国Brighton University（BU）进行短期学习。 以下是英方学校寄给你的课程安排选择表。请你仔细阅读课表，按要求给校方回复一封信。 Schedule for BU Summer English Courses English courses Total hours of Study Other Activities Date Six-week Course 120 Visits to Museums and Galleries July 1- August 15 four-week Course 80 Sightseeing July 1- August 1 书信内容 说明你要选择的课程并陈述理由； 介绍你目前的英语水平； 希望通过学习想提高的英语技能； 你的其他期望。 Dear Sir or Madam, Thank you for offering me the summer English courses. I think BU is very beautiful so I want to go. Fist I want six-week course, because my English is very bad so I want study BU long ago. I’m very want learn English so good, but I’m very lazy. So my English is very bad. My mother often ask me: “Why you English is very bad?” I’m just tell her: “I’m very lazy, so my English is very bad.” So I’m very want learn English very well. Can you help me? 1.审题不清 2.要点不全 3.错误率高 4.逻辑性差 5.缺乏读者意识 Dear Sir or Madam, Thank you for offering me the summer English courses. I want to go Brighton University to study English. Because my English is very poor. So I’m desire that in Brighton University study I can improve my English. On July 1- August 15, I will have six-week course, I would visit to Museums and Galleries. It can help me learn local culture. On July 1- August 1, I have four week course, the teacher will teach me how to say real English and write English. Then make me know the skill. Another time, I can go sightseeing with friends. I hope I’m be move open with speak English and could sing English songs. 审题不清 要点不全 缺乏读者意识 逻辑性差 语言表达错误率高 缺乏读者意识 错误率高 逻辑性差 缺乏读者意识 缺乏读者意识 错误率高 缺乏读者意识 错误率高 Dear Sir or Madam, Thank you for offering me the summer English courses. As for my choice between the two courses, I’d certainly prefer the four-week course for 80 hours of study. This would allow me more time to see your beautiful country while learning the language. I would like to do some traveling and make a few new friends.