英语书面表达公开课.ppt

Feedback of writing 2015/4/2 舟山中学 郑从宝 写作材料 班队课上，老师要求大家谈梦想，推荐你发言。请以My dream为题，写一篇120字左右的发言稿。开头结尾已经写好。不计入字数。 要点：1. 梦想是什么 2. 你的梦想 3. 如何实现你的梦想 注意：可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。 Good morning, my dear friends! I’m very glad to stand here to give you a speech about______________________ dreams._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thank you! I.审题 1.体裁: 2. 时态： 3. 人物： 4.内容： speech present I What is a dream?My dream. How to realize? Paragraphs? II.开头 每段开头点题: 踩点 Paragraph 1. Paragraph 2. Paragraph 3. A dream is….. My dream is… To realize my dream, ….. (Paragraph2). As for me, dream is so simple as everybody can do. But not everyone can conduct it perfectly. It’s my dream that I’m eager to be a photographer. (paragraph3) First, I should study hard and try to learn more knowledge about medicine. Second,… III.不连贯---无效信息 1. It’s my dream, how to achieve it? I have no idea. 2. What’s my dream? I don’t know. 3. As far as I am concerned, the dream is a thing that is beautiful to me. I should make great efforts to achieve my dream. 4. As a doctor, I will work in the hospital. IV.不连贯--逻辑性 1. Everyone has a dream, so that they will work hard to achieve it. Everyone has a dream, but only some will work hard to achieve theirs. 2.How to realize my dream? As a doctor, I will enjoy my work. How to realize my dream? To be a doctor, I will work hard at my lessons…. Hopefully, I’ll be admitted to my ideal medical college… （把握好上下文因果、对比、目的关系） V. 不连贯--结构松散 Travelling abroad and visiting some African countries are my dreams. Another dream is to make new friends around the world. By chatting with them, I’ll broaden my eyes. ----My dream is to visit some European countries to broaden my horizons and make some new friends as well. VI.不连贯—连接词 My dream is to travel all over the world. I love the nature, the mountains, the forests and so on. My dream is to travel all