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Writing 作文范例： Topic: My summer Holiday Plan Suggested ideas: Describe one thing you plan to do during the coming summer holiday. Tell when, where, and how you plan to do it. List at least two reasons for your decision. 关键词 时间限定 人物限定 写作要点 习作点评(内容篇)： 点评：文章中的内容分中只写到了暑假里去做什么，去哪做。 没写到具体什么时候去，怎么去和决定的动机(2个) 内容不够切题 习作点评(内容篇) ： 点评：事情、地点、时间、怎样做都已写到。 原因只有一个， 内容基本扣题. and I want to make my school more beautiful 做什么 在哪做 什么时间做 怎么做 原因 习作点评(内容篇) ： 点评：文章围绕主题，答题要点基本写到。 习作点评(语言/结构篇) ： 点评：本文语言结构简单，句型单一； 用词不够恰当，词汇不丰富。 表述生硬 句子重复 give them some water some a few some in 过于夸张 习作点评(语言/结构篇) ： 思考：什么样的文章是好文章？ 中文式表述 To make myself independent, my neighbour children their English 计划空, 要有具 体行动 I will teach them how to read the words correctly and help me with their holiday work patiently 中文式表述 表述生硬 I believe with the love and care in our hearts, our life will be much more wonderful! 不具体 好文章对于内容的基本要求： 1.紧扣主题，内容具体，表述清楚到位。 2.围绕主题组织语言，用词恰当。 3.围绕主题，灵活运用多种句式。 4.文章条理清楚，一气呵成，读来朗朗上口。 Group one: Topic: My summer Holiday Plan Suggested ideas: Describe one thing you plan to do during the coming summer holiday. Tell when, where, and how you plan to do it. List at least two reasons for your decision. Group two: Topic: I’m proud of myself Suggested ideas: What kind of person are you? What makes you proud of yourself? (give an example/examples) Why are you proud of yourself? Group three: Topic: I have learnt… Suggested ideas: Describe one thing you have learnt. Tell when, where and how you learnt it. List at least one benefit (好处) on you and give at least two reasons. I’m proud of myself How time flies! Now I am no longer a child but a responsible teenager. And I am proud of myself not only because I always achieve good marks but also because I know what I’m doing and what I will do in the future. Although I do not have much free time, I keep on doing exercise every day. I think