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原文：玉石村位于中国西南云南省蓝坪自治乡内。 原译：The village of Yushi is in the autonomous township of Lanping, in the southwestern Chinese province of Yunnan. 评析：地名翻译成英文时顺序应该从小到大；“Chinese”虽然可以用作形容词，但以此来修饰省份还是不妥。 改译：The village of Yushi is in the autonomous township of Lanping, Yunnan province in the southwest of China. 原文：玉石人对自己的传统文化引以为豪，他们重视对当地环境的保护。这里90%以上的面积为森林覆盖，当地居民深知如果他们与公路网联通，他们的森林就可能遭到砍伐，而他们脆弱的文化就可能会在强大的外界影响下受到威胁。 原译：Yushi people are proud of their cultural traditions, and emphasize the protection of the local environment, over 90% of which is covered by forest. The residents know that if they were connected to the road network, their forests could be felled and their fragile culture could be threatened under the strain of powerful external influences. 评析：译文第一句中be proud of和emohasize的动词形式不对应，且本段更注重强调后一句中对当地环境的保护，略显啰嗦；98%的森林覆盖率说的是这个区域的98%，而不是98%的环境；具体的砍伐对象是树，而不是作为集合名词的森林；could不表示“将会”，而本句显然是假设句，从句中以过去式形式提出假设条件，主句中应以would表示在这种情况下将会发生的事；文化不应该用fragile来修饰，这里强调的是文化的珍贵。 改译：Being proud of their cultural traditions, Yushi people place great emphasis on the protection of the local environment. Over 98% of the area is covered by forest. The residents know that if they were connected to the road network, the forests would be destroyed and their precious culture would be threatened by the strain of powerful external influence. 原文：多年来，他们选择与世隔绝，希望建立起强大、健康的社区后再对外开放。 原译：For many years they have chosen to remain isolated, hoping to build a strong and healthy community before opening to the outside world. 评析：choose是一个瞬间动词，不能表示延续性动作，而该句中“多年”已经说明需要一个延续性动词；此外，这句的后半句应该是手段目的关系，即要建立一个强大健康的社区，那么即使对外开放也可以对环境起到一定的保护作用。 改译：For many years, they have remained isolated, hoping to build a community strong and healthy enough to open to the outside world. 原文：旅游专家曾考察过这里，对当地独特的文化和环境留下了深刻的印象。 原译：Tourism experts have visited and were impressed by the unique local culture and environment. 评析：旅游专家去玉石不是“visit”而是“考察”其旅游资源的可开发性等；译文前半句中“and”前后两个谓语一个用现在完成时一个用过去式，显然不符合语法规则。 改译：Tourism experts have i