Teaching-students-to-write-精选版.ppt

细节描写 What you do, think, see, taste, touch, smell … / How you feel * ? In the deepening twilight three figures were walking across the lawn towards the window, they all carried guns under their arms, and one of them was additionally burdened with a white coat hung over his shoulders. A tired brown spaniel kept close at their heels. Noiselessly they neared the house, and then a hoarse young voice chanted out of the dusk: “I said, Bertie, why do you bound?” Three men approached the house. 1. What readers see: 2. What readers hear: 3 .How readers feel: a hoarse young voice “I said, Bertie, why do you bound?” deepening twilight, three figures walking, the lawn, the window, guns, a white coat, a dog, the house * Soon I picked up enough English to understand horrible wars were in the air. Russian missiles were being collected and brought together, trained supposedly on New York City. On the television, President Kennedy, looking worried, was explaining we might have to go to war against the enemies. At school, we had air-raid drills: a worrying bell would go off and we’d move into the hall, fall to the floor, cover our heads with our coats, and imagine our hair falling out, the bones in our arms going soft. At home Mommy and my sisters and I prayed for world peace. In class, I heard new vocabulary items: nuclear bomb, radioactive fallout, bomb shelter. Sister Zoe explained how it would happen. She drew a picture of a mushroom on the black board and dotted a cloud of chalk marks for the dusty fallout that would kill us all. * General: John is a good student. General: Your relative is nice to me. General: The man signed the paper. Specific: In college, John has been awarded a scholarship annually over five years. Specific: Your aunt Betty always stops and talks to me when she meets me in the street. Specific: The biology teacher hurriedly scribbled his name on the paper. * 细节描述（具体化） The sky was blue and clear. Wang Wei wa