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2009福建省单科质检 假如你校学生最近进行体检,请根据你校学生的近视率呈上升趋势这一现象,用英语写一篇墙报稿,对改善视力提出几点建议。内容包括以下要点： 1.光线,读写姿势,看电视、用电脑的时间； 2.眼保健操,户外活动,睡眠时间； 3.多吃含维生素A的食物,定期检查； 4.其他建议。 注意： ??? 1.开头句子已给出,不计人总词数； ??? 2.可根据内容要点适当发挥,但不要逐条翻译； ??? 3.词数：120左右。 参考词汇：sitting posture坐姿?Vitamin A维生素A 优点:（比较上次书面表达） 1.能分层次分段落写，并用上适当的连词。 2.能尽量用学过的词组和句型表达（如：倒装句，强调句，表建议的虚拟句，定语从句，非谓语等) 3.卷面书写涂改或潦草现象减少。 缺点： 1.有些同学用阿拉伯数字列点逐条翻译. 2.为了刻意写出高级表达，但却出现太多毛病（如：一些低级的单词拼写错误、名词的可数与不可数、词性变化，主谓一致，一个句子同时有多个谓语） 3.还存在许多中式英语（主要是直接翻译过来）。 常见错误： 1.do eyes exercise (x)----do eye exercises(√) 2.prevent/protect our eyes from (the) nearsighted(x)-- …….from being/getting nearsighted (√) 3.read or write under the bright light(x)--- …….in the bright light(√) 4.eat more foods include Vitamin A. (x)---- ……food containing / which contains Vitamin A 5.save our eyes/make our eyes better(x)-----improve our eyesight. 6.Here are some advices for you. (x) Here are some pieces of advice/some sugesstions for you. (√) 7.Finaly，eat food which have Vitamin A and make regularlly examinations will be a good way for you (x) ----Finally, eating food which has Vitamin A and taking \ having eye examinations regularly will do good to your eyes. 8. Enough sleeping(×)---enough sleep Step 1 Good phrases sentences 要点1. 对改善视力提出几点建议 * In order to improve our eyesight, I think it is important to take the following tips. * Here are some suggestions of mine, which may be helpful to you. *It is self- evident that we are supposed to have good eyes for our future. So it is of great importance that we should protect our eyes from now on. * Here comes some useful advice on how to improve our eyesight. * It’s urgent to take effective measures to cope with the problems. 要点2. Good phrases 光线; *read or write in bright light *pay attention to the light we read or write in 读写姿势; *keep a proper sitting posture *get rid of the bad habits of our sitting posture