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六年级英语作文及点评【五篇】 导读：本文 六年级英语作文及点评【五篇】 ，仅供参考，如果觉得很不错，欢迎点评和分享。 【第一篇： Winter 】 Winter Although winter means cold weather, I love it all the same. I think winter is a beautiful season, especially when it snows. Snowflakes fall down naughtily. They fall on branches of trees, on roofs of houses and on wheat fields. Soon the whole earth will be dressed in white. Everything is shining in the sun. Every time it snows, I will remember an old saying, Winter has come, can spring be far away? 【译文】 冬天 虽然冬天意味着寒冷， 但我仍然热爱冬天。 我认为冬天是一个美丽的季节，尤其是下雪的日子。雪花像玲珑剔透的小精灵，调皮地飘落下来。它们落在树枝上， 屋顶上和麦田里。很快整个大地都银妆素裹起来。太阳出来后，万物都闪烁着光芒。每次下雪，我都会记起一 句格言：“冬天来了，春天还会远吗 ? ” 教师点评：短文内容细腻而不乏活泼， 能将朴实的英语语言翻译 的如此美丽汉语，可见你是个喜欢学习的人， 希望继续努力。 【第 二篇： Li Ying ’ S Hobby Li】 Ying ’ S Hobby Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening. Does she like danc ing? No, she doesn ’ t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy. 【要领点评】 这一篇写爱好的文章 ,小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习 ,他没有具体写到刘莹的某一种爱好 ,而是从学习到课余的多种爱好入手 ,对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画 .从“爱好”这个角度来看刘莹的 话，我们会觉得这个形象很饱满。 小朋友们写这种“叙事写人”作文时， 可以从两个角度下手： 一 是具体地描绘 ;二是和上面小朋友一样，粗线条地勾画，二者各有所 长，另处在行文中使用一些问句，使用一些转述的话，可以使作文更 有灵气，避免了平铺直叙的缺点。比如上文的“ sheDoeslike dancing?  No,  she doesn  ’  t.  ”和“  sayshe her hobbies  make her happy.  ”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。  【第 三篇： Don ’  t be gainst the traffic  】  Don ’  t be against the traffic rules I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can  ’  t cross the road ,s wait. If the light turns green, I know it means walk across the road .I always ride on  the  right  side  of  “ Go” the  , and then road .I am never against the traffic rules. 【要领点评】 这篇作文的题目是“不要违反交通规则”， 小作者没有说一些空 话，而是从自己的经历写起，叙述自己以什么方式去上学，在上学的 路上是怎