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读后续写精批精改系列8：儿子的肖像画

●原文呈现:

?阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

Awealthymanandhissonlovedtocollectworksofart.TheyhadeverythingfromPicassotoRaphael.Theywouldsittogetherandadmirethegreatworksofart.WhentheVietnamWarbrokeout,thesonwenttowar.Hewasveryresilientandcourageous,anddiedinbattlewhilerescuinganothersoldier.Thefatherwastoldthesadnewsandindeepsorrowforhisonlyson.Aboutamonthlater,justbeforeChristmas,therewasaknockatthedoor.Ayoungmanstoodtherewithalargepackageinhishands.

Hesaid,“Sir,youdontknowme,butIamthesoldierforwhomyoursongavehislife.Hesavedmanylivesthatday,andhewascarryingmetosafetywhenabulletstruckhimintheheart,andhediedinstantly.Heoftentalkedaboutyouandyourloveforart.Theyoungmanheldouthispackage.“lknowthisisntmuch.Imnotreallyagreatartist,butIthinkyoursonwouldhavewantedyoutohavethis.”

Thefatheropenedthepackage.Itwasaportraitofhisson,paintedbytheyoungman.Hewasamazedatthewaythesoldierhadcaughtthepersonalityofhissoninthepainting.Thefatherwassodrawntotheeyesthatwelledupintearshisowneyes.Hethankedtheyoungmanandofferedtopayhimforthepicture.“Ohno,sir,Icouldneverrepaywhatyoursondidforme.ltsagift.

Thefatherhungtheportraitonthewallofthesittingroom.Everytimevisitorscametohishome,hetookthemtoseetheportraitofhissonbeforeheshowedthemanyoftheothergreatworkshehadcollected.

注意:

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;

3.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Thefatherdiedafewmonthslaterandhislawyerorganizedagreatauctionofhispaintingsaccordingtohiswill.

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Buttoeveryonessurprise,thelawyerannouncedtheauctionwasover!

●原文大意：

本文讲述了一个富豪父亲和儿子共同喜欢收集艺术品，但儿子参加越南战争后壮烈牺牲。一个月后，一名曾经被儿子拯救的年轻士兵带来了一幅自己亲手绘制的儿子肖像画作为礼物，父亲非常感动，挂在客厅的墙上。他每次带客人参观家中的收藏品，总是将这幅画放在最前面，表达对儿子的怀念和感恩之情。

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