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读后续写精批精改系列5:美丽的心灵

●原文呈现:

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

??Duringthispastyear,I’vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn’tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK(千斤顶),andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.

Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw(锯子)fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.

Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.

Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman’shand,buthewouldn’ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.

注意:

1．续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

?Para.1:WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.

?Para.2:Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.

●原文框架和主题梳理：

本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了去年作者汽车出现了三次故障，大多数人都懒得帮忙，作者对此感到很心厌。有一次，他的汽车又出故障了。他在路边求助了接近3个小时，但是没有人停下来帮忙。就在打算放弃的时候，一个过路的墨西哥家庭停下来，提供了帮助。

●主题：

文章主题是关于作者遇到汽车故障时，没有得到大多数人的帮助，但最终一家墨西哥人为他提供了援助，并且在援助过程中展现出的善良和乐于助人精神。同时也反映了人