温州第八中学 陈一军.ppt

温州第八中学 陈一军 POLISH your writing A Dreaming Day 如果你可以随心所欲地度过一天，你会怎么过？请用英语写一篇短文，描述以下内容： 你会邀请谁和你一起度过这一天？为什么？ 你会去哪里？做些什么事？为什么？ 注意： 邀请的人可以是亲朋好友也可以是古今中外名人 Passage 1: 邀请的“人物”过于特殊，审题不明，扣分 旅行部分对被邀请的人物只字未提，审题不明，扣分 审题指导1： 完整没有遗漏，例子可以新颖，但是不能太特殊化 审题 || || Therefore, some people just idle time away, wandering about and doing nothing meaningful. 遗漏要点 无关紧要的话删除 比例不完美 不是讲故事能手 Passage 2: An afternoon tea is a good choice for us to kill time. I am happy to enjoy a typical British Tea time with Jane. It is in one of the local shops along London Road. We will have tea and share some interesting stories. In the garden, the sunshine warms my heart. I will feel just like Alice in the wonderful land. I just focus time and energy on studying, and are too busy to appreciate little fun things around. What makes a good “story”\experience? Passage 2: An afternoon tea is a good choice for us to kill time. I am happy to enjoy a typical British Tea time with Jane. It is in one of the local shops along London Road. We will have tea and share some interesting stories. In the garden, the sunshine warms my heart. I will feel just like Alice in the wonderful land. I just focus time and energy on studying, and are too busy to appreciate little fun things around. when where who what what how why What makes a good “story”\experience? Passage 2: An afternoon tea is a good choice for us to kill time. I am happy to enjoy a typical British Tea time with Jane. It is in one of the local shops along London Road. We will have tea and share some interesting stories. In the garden, the sunshine warms my heart. I will feel just like Alice in the wonderful land. I just focus time and energy on studying, and am too busy to appreciate little fun things around. 审题指导2：讲述故事或者经历时： when, where, who, what, why, how