商务写作原则和应用.ppt

商务电子邮件写作 上海新东方学校（苏州分校） 张众 zhangzhongchina@ 商务写作的基本原则 Thank you for your offer by fax. We are interested in your product of computers. As our order is a relatively large one, we will appreciate it if you can lower your price a little bit. I look forward to your reply. 正式用语与非正式用语 The main 10 industries in my lovely hometown are light engineering, furniture-making, sugar-refining, etc. 10 industries → ten industries My lovely hometown → my hometown Etc. → include The main ten industries in my hometown include light engineering, furniture-making, sugar-refining. 正式用语与非正式用语 Here is the BMW project. Let us know what you think at Monday’s meeting. Here is … Let us… what you think Please review the attached BMW report. I look forward to hearing your comment at next Monday’s meeting. Thanks. 正式用语与非正式用语 The problems I have found are as follows: ※ The car door needs improving ※ The window glass should better be altered ※ Some problems exist with air-conditioner 人称使用的建议 “I 大于 we” Please contact me at 8803 8804. Please contact us at 8803 8804. “you 大于 I” I will be available at any time. You can contact me at your convenience. 数字和比较 用蓝牙耳机接听手机，比用普通耳机接听手机要方便得多。 It is more convenient to use Bluetooth earphone than to use ordinary earphone for cell phone. 采用我们技术的产品已经占据30％以上的市场。 Products with our technology account for more than thirty percent of market. （Constitute / account for / represent） 描述变化趋势 该产品的市场份额在2006年是10％，2007年增长到15％，增长了5％。 This product increased in its market share by five percent from ten percent in 2006 to fifteen percent in 2007. 用连词连接句子 （1）Bluetooth earphone constitutes a majority of market. （2）Ordinary earphone constitutes only a minority. Bluetooth earphone constitutes a majority of market, but / while ordinary earphone constitutes only a minority. 分词 我做了一系列调查。我建议添置一台电脑以应付日益增多的办公工作。 （1）I did a series of investigation.（2）I recommend that we should buy