2016届海南省琼中中学高三英语二轮复习---高三下第三次调研考试作文讲评.pptVIP

应试书信常用模板 月考作文得分情况分析(Class 1) 月考作文得分情况分析(Class 8) 考生作文 句型仿写训练 Homework 作文讲评训练 假如你是李华，你的美国朋友Mary最近迷恋于网购，花费了大量金钱。请你给她写封邮件，主要内容包括： 1. 劝说她改掉这一做法； 2. 指出其弊端； 3. 提出建议（培养兴趣爱好、专注学习）。 注意：1. 词数100左右。信的开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 作文审题三定 1. 体裁 2. 时态 3. 人称 书信格式（称呼，落款等）一般已给出 开头段：问候/自我介绍/写信意图 中间段：正文，材料要求内容（可适当再分段） 结尾段：客套致辞 11.1 2 18 失分原因： 1. 词汇量不足，句子表达不正确； 2. 弊端的解释上有多余的表达； 3.缺少过渡词和高级表达，文章显得平铺直叙。 16~20分:8人 6~10分:9人 11~15分:21人 1~5分:11人 平均分 最低分 最高分 8.2 0 20 失分原因： 1. 词汇量不足，句子表达不正确； 2. 弊端的解释上有多余的表达； 3.缺少过渡词和高级表达，文章显得平铺直叙。 。 16~20分: 4人 6~10分: 13人 11~15分: 15人 1~5分: 10人 0分: 6人 平均分 最低分 最高分 Dear Mary, How are you these days? I miss you so much. I hear that you are addicted to shopping online, which makes me worry about you. It will cost you lots of money so I’m writing to persuade you to give up the habit. As we know, going shopping online costs you much time and money, which can cause bad influence on your study. Here are some suggestions I want to share with you. First of all, you should develop some other habits, such as reading books and taking part in some activities. Futhermore, as a student, it’s your responsibility to put most of the efforts into studying, which can reward your parents best. Only in this way will you become successful and be admitted to a good university for further education. I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you. I’m looking forward to you reply. Yours, Li Hua 1. 我们都知道，玩手机会消耗我们大量的时间，也对我们的视力有害。(as we all know, cause bad influence on, 定语从句) 2. 只有这样你才能够专注在学习上并考上你喜欢的大学。(only引导状语放在句首部分倒装，be admitted to, focus on) 1. As we all know, playing on the mobile phone costs lots of time, which can also cause bad influence on our eyesight. 2. Only in this way can you focus on your study and be admitted to the university you are interested in. Recite the sample composition.