2017年高考英语二轮复习 第二部分 题型突破 专题17 书面表达 第3讲 议论文的写作课件.pptVIP

三、画蛇添足、语言不简洁 修改前：Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission.The air pollution is becoming more and more serious which is caused by buses and cars.Whats more, so many rivers are polluted by dirty water which is from factories.In addition，sandstorms struck us now and then, from which we suffered a lot. 修改后：Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission.As a result，people have to suffer sandstorms now and then.Whats more, as buses and cars give off a lot of poisonous gases, the air is getting dirtier and dirtier.Moreover, there are many rivers polluted by dirty water from factories.The situation is becoming more and more serious. 【点拨】尽量使用一些简单明了的句子，不要啰嗦和拖沓冗长。否则，会引起阅卷人的反感，降低试卷分数。 四、语言平乏，词汇档次欠高，不会使用一些复杂句式 他就是我昨天见的那个人。 修改前：He is a man, I saw him yesterday. 修改后：He is the man whom/that I saw yesterday. 【点拨】不少考生大脑记忆库词汇量储存不够，难以灵活运用语言，导致语言平乏，同一种表达重复较多；同时对一些复杂句式不能真正掌握和灵活运用。过于简单的句子使文章缺少逻辑性、可读性，不能使阅卷人产生兴趣。这就要求学生平常要注重词汇量和一些短语、表达的积累，尽量使用一些高级词汇；同时在一篇文章中要运用几个复合句来彰显文章的亮点。 五、文章缺乏连贯性 修改前：Suddenly, a car ran quickly from the third street and turned to the west.The car didnt stop and hit the old man.The driver didnt stop and have a look.The car ran away quickly.The car was yellow and the driver was a woman. 修改后：Suddenly, a car turned west from the 3rd Street to the Park Road.It hit the old man, but it didnt stop and ran away quickly.I noticed the car was yellow and the driver was a woman. 【点拨】有些考生在词汇的运用和内容的表达上都基本达到要求，但由于句与句、段与段之间没有添加恰当的连接成分，使句子之间和段落之间缺乏必要的过渡和衔接，影响了表达的效果。 1．使用高级词汇 写作时，如能贴切自然地运用高级词汇与高级句式，便会为作文增添色彩。使用高级词汇有三大技巧： 状元策略 (1)标新立异 写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，别人有可能想不到的词汇，恰当地求新求异。 I received your email last week, but I am busy preparing for my final exam, which is important for me, so I didnt reply to you without delay. →I received your email last week, but I am busy preparing for my final exam, which is vital for me, so I didnt reply to you without delay. (2)短语优先 多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。 Developing a good habit is also of great importance.