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写作训练 湖北枣阳一中 唐玉菊 王锋 赵清娥 书面表达（满分2） 每年高考，各个考点都会挤满陪考的家长。假如你是即将参加高考的李华，你的父母就此事征询你的意见，请你根据以下要点给父母写一封回信，谈谈自己的想法。 1. 不想因为自己高考而耽搁他们的工作； 2. 相信自己有独立处理事情、面对挑战的能力。 注意： 1. 词数：100左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 . 参考词汇： 高考 College Entrance Examination Dear Mom and Dad, ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours sincerely Li Hua 学生作文1： Dear Mom and Dad, I’m writing this letter with the purpose of telling my own opinion towards the issue. There is a growing tendency among parents to accompany their children during the College Entrance Examination. This is due to the significance of the examination. However, in my opinion, you needn’t do like that. For one thing, a lot of work should be done. Therefore, it’s unnecessary for you to put off the work owing to my examination. For another thing, I believe I have the ability to deal with the problem by myself. To be precise, the College Entrance Examination is a big challenge that must be faced. In that case, I want to face it without your help. I hope you can understand me and agree with my choice. Your sincerely Li Hua 评分：21分。 该学生作文属于第五档。 得分理由： 1.结构布局 本文为三段式作文： 第一段提出写信的目的。 第二段作者按照题目要求谈了自己对父母陪读的想法。此段内容覆盖了两个要点：(不想因为自己高考而耽搁他们的工作；(相信自己有独立处理事情、面对挑战的能力。 4过渡词的使用 however, for one thing, for another thing, therefore, in that case 优点： 书信的内容覆盖了要点。 作文采用三段式结构谋篇行文，文中很好地使用了过渡词。如：however, fo