英语写作教程[001].pptVIP

３.　Repetition重复 Watching TV too much is harmful to your eyes. If you stay in front of TV for too long time your eyes might get hurt. You will be near-sighted. You cannot see clearly when you read. You even cannot see clearly a friend when you meet him in the street. 第一句是主题句不错，第二句就是它的重复了。 ４.　One-side of the evidence片面 Our school is an Army school, so we must obey many rules. Because of this my house is special in some ways. First, our house is very clean, have no piece of paper on the ground. Everything in my house is neat. Perhaps some other house is dirty, but if my house is dirty we would be punished and forced to clean it. 除了语言错误，整段只讲了一个内容“We must keep our rooms clean.”不足以证明“We must obey many rules.” 5. Logic confusion逻辑思维混乱 University students are always busy with their study on Sundays(主题句——大学生星期天都忙与学习). They never get up before 9 o’clock to have their breakfast. In the morning, most of them will stay in the washroom to wash their clothes. After lunch, if weather permits, they go for an outing with their classmates; or they spend the whole afternoon in the library, reviewing lessons or reading recent periodicals. They all get together in the dormitory in the evening, singing and chattering until they feel tired.(拓展句义与主题句思想恰好相反———悠闲放松) 改进方法： 1. 改进主题句为： University students usually have a good relaxation on Sundays. 2.重写拓展句： University students are always busy with their study on Sundays. They get up early so that they can get a seat in the reading room. They bring with them not only their textbooks, reference books and assignment to fulfill, but also some water and bread for lunch…… Should Students Do Business Or Not In recent years, doing business is very popular on the campus. More and more college students spend more time doing business. This phenomenon causes a lot of hot argument. Is it right or not ? In my opinion, we can not say it is right or wrong directly because the reason is complex. On the other hand, many students do business in order to redu