福州市2010—20杨11学年末高三质量检查书面表达.pptVIP

书面表达指导 特别注意： 1）认真审题，确定体裁； 2）把握要点，注意自然连贯； 3）表达有效，适度发挥；要抓住文章的灵魂，即文章的内容要点，合情合理地发挥。 4）特别要注意良好书写习惯的养成。 书面表达 随着高考的临近，越来越多的学生开始焦虑，他们的健康问题引起越来越多人的关注。请你根据以下内容，以 “青少年心理健康问题大家谈”为话题 , 给 21 世纪英文报投稿. 注意 : 1. 短文必须包括所有要点 , 可以适当发挥，行文连贯 ; 2. 短文开头已为你写好 , 不计入总词数 ; 3. 词数 120 左右。 参考词汇 :psychological 心理 ( 上 ) 的 consultant 提供咨询的专家 （另注：少于100词，扣2分。） 【参考范文】 With the national entrance examination coming on, more and more graduating students suffer from various kinds of anxieties. Some cannot eat or sleep well and fail to concentrate on their studies. Some are afraid of taking exams and others even lose hope for their future life. 列举焦虑的现象，用Some…. Some…and others…平行结构，表达比较清晰，语气贯通。 最后一点用even一词，说明焦虑的严重性需要引起大家的重视。 The causes of the mental problems above may include too much school work, high expectations from the teachers and the parents and lack of physical exercise and communication. 说明焦虑的起因，用三个并列的名词短语，表达简练。 简单的一个above起到了承上的作用。 句中用了may一词，可以避免给人主观臆断的感觉。 同时范文对pressure具体化的拓展，使内容相对饱满。 What should we do to solve these problems? In my opinion, firstly we should take more exercise and learn to relax ourselves. Secondly, we are supposed to talk to our friends about our problems and seek advice from psychological consultants. Meanwhile, schools should set up special offices to help students solve their mental problems. Parents should also care more about the mental health of their children. Only by doing so can we solve these problems. ( 148 words ) 如何解决焦虑的问题应是阐述的重点。范文根据所给的提示，针对第二段的causes，从students，schools，parents三方面提出了问题的解决之道。 句首的设问句，给人留下思考的空间，也使短文更富有活力。 firstly，secondly等表示顺序、时间（meanwhile）、递进（also）的连接词的使用使结构连贯、层次分明、脉络清晰。 最后用倒装句结束短文，比较“给力”。 问题与错误 1. 审题问题： 此点重点在于写 phenomena，即焦虑现象（焦虑的表现形式），不能只写焦虑什么。 Some feel worried that they will perform badly in the exam. Some worry about the results of the examination , which are vital for them since this determines their future admission to a high quality university. 范文： Some cannot eat or sleep