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叙事经历类书面表达 总体分析 情景设定：主人公日记， 新闻稿件 题目设定：图画式情景作文 提纲式 应试技巧 记叙六要素： 时间，人物，地点，起因，经过，结果 两确定 确定时态（过去式）；确定人称 要点全，有侧重 情节侧重发展高潮，避免流水账， 行文一致性（逻辑一致） 记叙要与议论/评论或感想前后呼应 不要一味用长难关联词，流于表面。 时间过度——天然过渡法宝 时间点：at 7’o clock, on May day.. 时间段: at dusk, from dawn till dusk, in the course of, for a while, for the time being, now and then, lately 时间顺序: on arrival, later, soon, next, then, afterwards, finally, eventually, in the end, meanwhile, until, since, no sooner…than, be doing…when 过渡衔接 空间过渡 eg: at the foot of the mountain, halfway up the mountain, at the peak of the mountain 因果过渡 主人公进行某些行为的原因，及动作所产出的结果，找出图片间的隐性信息，无缝对接。 语言精准，句式多样 时态，主谓记心头 重视单词拼写 避免词性混乱 关注动词用法，尝试造句练习 变换句子开头，有意识地运用非谓语，介词短语，副词，从句，等作为句子开头。 09浙江: 志愿者LiYue,ZhangHua去Sunshine Nursing Home敬老院开展志愿者活动(送水果，打扫，聊天等)。写篇新闻报道要点：1时间，地点，人物，活动2老人的反应3简短评论 Li Yue and Zhang Hua are our school’s volunteers. On June 1st, they went to the Sunshine Nursing Home. They cleaned the house. They played the games with the old men. Then, they sent some apples to the old people. They are very friendly, and they got well with each other. The old people are very happy. Li Yue and Zhang Hua communicated the things with the old people. The old people hoped them work hard. At last, they said good-bye to the old people. Li Yue and Zhang Hua are both good students in our school. We should remember them. We should take good care of the old people in our family. 点评： 漏掉了一个信息；基本满足任务的要求，但语法结构不够丰富，13个句子都是简单句。非谓语，复合句没有体现，全篇单调乏味，时态失误，句型结构有误。上下文句与句之间连接词不到位，语流存在断裂，结构不紧凑，缺乏流畅感。基本达到写作目的 第三档。（13-18） 范文 On May 1st, Li Yue and Zhang Hua, two students from Class 3, Grade 2, reached the Sunshine Nursing Home to work as volunteers. They presented the elderly with fresh fruits to wish them a healthy life. Besides, they helped clean the houses and had nice talk with the elderly in order to ease their loneliness and anxiety. 包含所有要点，动词运用得当，多处使用不定式作状语 All the elderly found that it was encouraging to see the young lives, who made