2022高考英语考点突破Unit阶段写作方略（人教）5.ppt

佳作赏析 记叙——描述人物类; (2010·浙江高考)最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇100～120个词的短文。 你的文章应包括下列要点： 1．李越的事迹及其对同学的影响。 2．你的评论。;上一页;1．话题特点：本篇书面表达属于记叙文中描述人物的一类。记人侧重对人物的介绍，包括人物的姓名、年龄、外貌、经历、学历、专业、爱好、特长、事迹、性格等多个方面。写人的记叙文离不开记事，但以记人为主导，所写的事物都是为衬托人服务的，所以，记叙时，外貌的描写、性格的刻画等，都要服务于人。 2．写好这类作文要注意： (1)要按照要求进行写作，包括所给的全部知识点，既不能遗漏也不能随意添加。 (2)对题目所给的信息进行适当重组，安排好写作顺序，突出重点???息。;(3)正确运用描写人物的词汇和句型。 (4)正确运用时态：描写人物的外貌、性格、兴趣等常用一般现在时，而描写人物的出生、教育背景、经历、事迹等常用一般过去时。 3．本篇文章的写作要点： (1)使用第三人称及一般过去时来介绍当天的活动和同学们对此活动的感受。 (2)段落及内容：第一段提出主题，即李越被评为每周之星；第二段写出自己的评论。 (3)描述事迹注意时间、地点及人物细节描写的添加；评论时注意使用总结描述性的形容词。;Star Student of the Week Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week” for what she did for our class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday, Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest. While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms, she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting. Finally, she found the right clothes. Deeply moved by her efforts, we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest. Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class. Besides, she often devotes her spare time to helping others. She deserves the honour and we should learn from her. 。; 本文语言精练，构思合理。词汇的使用(如时间表达)，准确到位；恰当地运用了一些短语及一些复杂的 句式结构；而finally和besides的使用，使层次更加清晰，成为文章的一大亮点。 (1)短语类：look for，be moved by，try ones best，devote...to... (2)句子类：...looking for the costumes we would wear... While the rest of us.... Deeply moved by her efforts... (3)过渡语：finally，besides;习作过关 你的好友李平来自偏远山区，家庭经济困难，入校时，他的成绩不太好。然而他虚心好学，不懂就问，成绩提高很快，在期末考试中取得第一名，并获得奖学金。请你从下面几个方面介绍一下她的情况，并谈谈你有何打算。 1．有志向、有信心(成绩名列前茅)。 2．学习习惯(有周密计划；不拖拉，不开夜车)。 3．为人处事(乐于助人)。;上一页;【参考范文】 Li Ping, a good friend of mine, came from a poor family in a faraway mountainous village. He is now well known in our school because he took the first place in the final exam