【读后续写】2021年12月山水联盟读后续写讲评：破旧的被褥 名师课件-宣晔霏.pptx

2021.12“山水联盟”读后续写——破旧的被褥浙江省春晖中学宣晔霏

Aworn-outquilt

1.Ipeeredovermygrandma’sshoulderasshesewedpiecesofclothtogether.ThetwopiecesbecameonefasterthanI’dimagined.Thecolors,however,lookeduglywhenputtogetherandnoneofthepatternsmatched.Allthepatches(补丁)onthisblanketseemedtodisagree.2.“Grandma,that’stheugliestquilt(棉被)I’veeverseen.”3.“Oh,sweetie,it’swarmandbeautiful,”saidGrandma,pointingtoapileofcrazypatternedshirtsandsuits.“IcantaketheseoldclothesthatGrandpaandIwillneverwearagainandturnthemintosomethingusefulandgood.It’snotthequiltsappearancebutthelovethatsewsittogetherthatmakesitbeautiful.Thisquiltwillkeepyouwarmonacoldnightliketonight.AndIknowthatforafact.”Grandmaputherhandonmyshoulder,“Noteveryoneisasluckyasweare.Here,putonyourcoat.We’llgetasecondopinionabouthowuglymyquiltsare.”4.Grandmafoldedafinishedquiltandtuckeditintoashoppingbag.Afterwards,wegotinthecaranddrovedowntown.Thewhitesnowturnedgrayeraswegottothecity.Eventually,Grandmapulledupatadarkalley(胡同)andwegotoutofthecar.Theterriblesmellofrottinggarbagemademefeelsickandpinchmynoseshut.Grandmatookmyhandandledmetothestreetlamp.Icouldseethesnowshimmering(发出微光)inthelight.5.Grandmapaused.“There’susuallysomebodydownthisalley.It’squietandoutofthewind---agoodplacetostayoncoldnights.Anicewarmquiltmightmakeitevenbetter.”6.Thedarkengulfed(吞没)GrandmaandIaswesteppeddeepintothealley.Thepavementwascrackedandmissinginspots.Chickenbonesandstainedboxeslitteredtheirway.AndGrandma’sshoesmadealoudsoundwitheachstep.Feelingfrightened,IsqueezedGrandma’shand.Grandmasqueezedmyhandback.“It’sOK.”shesmiled.7.“Who’sthere?”shoutedavoiceoutofthedarkness.Languageaccumulation:

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