书面-最美教师演示文稿.ppt

学校将组织“校园最美教师”的评选活动，要求学生推荐心中的最美教师。你想要推荐你的老师王华。请根据以下要点，用英语写一篇120词左右的短文，推荐你心中的最美教师。要求如下： 1. 简要表述王老师在你心目中的印象； 2. 用1～2个事例进行具体描述； 3. 不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。 审题： 时态： 事例描述用一般过去时，其余用一般现在时 文章布局： 第一部分：推荐王老师，你对他（她）的总体印象【简要】 第二部分：具体事例一、二个，紧扣上文的总体印象来展开描述，以突出王老师特别的品质【具体】 第三部分：总结性的结尾，首尾呼应【简洁】 书写及卷面问题： 文章结构篇章： 上下文之间缺少有效的衔接； 这不是议论文。 缺少一个自然的结尾。 1. 单词拼写及词性误用 recommend teach—taught considerate adj. considerable 2. 句子的内在逻辑错误 3. 所举事例不当 4. 事例不够具体，未能让读者产生共鸣 5. 事例中过多的无关紧要的细节描写，淡化了主要人物的描述 6. 事例描写所反映出的王老师的品质与上文所列的品质不符 7. 句式单调，缺少多样性 佳文欣赏 佳文欣赏 I recommend my teacher, Wang Hua, as the most beautiful teacher on campus, not just for her devotion to teaching, but also for her motherly love and care for all her students. I still remember one night when I felt terrible pains in my stomach. My roommates immediately called Ms. Wang, who rushed me to the nearest hospital. Upon arrival, she busied herself consulting the doctor, getting my test results and comforting me. When she learned there was nothing serious with me, she sighed with relief and kept me company until my parents arrived. At that moment, I felt my tears welling up in my eyes. Such is my teacher, a devoted and caring teacher, who, in my opinion, well deserves the honor of the most beautiful teacher on campus. (129 words) It is my geography teacher Wang Hua that I intend to recommend because what he impresses on us is not only his expertise in teaching but his care for us. Being knowledgeable and humorous, Mr. Wang never fails to spread knowledge in an interesting and simple way. In a class about earth’s rotation and revolution, he held a basketball, which represented the earth, rotating it with his body circling around the classroom at the same time. Thus, the seemingly difficult process of study was neither complex nor dull. The other day, I was alone in the classroom. Knowing something was bothering me, he cautiously approached me. After he patiently heard my story out, he offered his sincere and sound suggestions, which clea