英语作文——范文评析on excessive packaging.docVIP

题目：On Excessive Packaging提纲：1. 目前很多商品存在过度包装现象2. 出现这一现象的原因3. 我对这一现象的看法和建议 Model 1 On Excessive Packaging Nowadays the phenomena of excessive packaging of goods are prevailing普遍的，流行的 in our society: clothes swathed in tissue paper, placed in cardboard box and finally wrapped in well-designed plastic bags, imported bottles of grape wine packed in wooden boxes, fruits put in hand-woven baskets, to name but a few.（第一段用模版句型 the phenomena of …..are ..导出，后面用几个精彩的排比句说明） There are several causes of excessive packaging. The first reason is that a large number of companies believe that they can attract customers’ attention and stimulate their purchasing desire by over-packaging their goods, thus gaining more profits. On the other hand, quite a number of consumers mistakenly hold that the more delicate the package is, the better the quality will be, thus encouraging excessive packaging.（第二段用模版句型there are several causes of…展开第二段对原因的分析，接着用2个层次具体分析原因，分别是the first reason is that….和on the other hand……,这一段最精彩的是作者对形容词，动词的选择丰富，比如attract, stimulate , gain, encourage 等） In my point of view, excessive packaging has disastrous consequences, including the loss of precious resources, excessive consumption of water and energy, and unnecessary extraction of scarce land for landfill.（此段谈我的看法，亮点是作者很好运用了名词短语的排比，使语句充满节奏感，不呆板，充分显示了作者对名词的驾驭能力，比如 the loss of , consumption of ,extraction of ） To solve the problem, it’s necessary to take the following measures. First, laws and regulations must be made to restrict excessive packaging of companies. In addition, we need to raise consumer’s awareness that excessive packaging doesn’t equal to high quality and advocate packaging recycling. (最后段谈如何解决问题，作者也用到了亮点表达restrict,ｒａｉｓｅ　ａｗａｒｅｎｅｓｓ　ｏｆ　，　ｅｑｕａｌ　ｔｏ　等等) Moedel 2 I assume that you are familiar with the phenomenon of “Excessive Packaging”.Taking a look around, we can find examples with ease: a small computer is packed in a thick and heavy carton, clothes are putted in a well-designed plastic bags and moon