满分写作周周赢 PPTWednesday　考场作文研析 (9).pptx

满分写作周周赢;赢在微点高中英语满分写作周周赢;;读后续写满分技巧4巧用4种途径解决4类故事冲突

高考读后续写选材主题主要为“Conflict/Problem→Solution”模式。所涉及的冲突主要有4类:①人间自有真情(主人公遇到贫困、残疾或孤独、失败或自卑等困境);②迷路;③脱险(摆脱野兽攻击、水灾、火灾等);④争吵矛盾(误解、背叛或伤害)系列。解决冲突/问题基本通过4个途径:①他人的:encouragement、comfort、kindness、love和help;②他物:如河流、太阳等;③自己的:courage、bravery、effort、calmness、wisdom和inspiration;④彼此的:突出和谐、宽恕、改变与成长。;;;注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。

WhenDadsawAlicewalkingthedog,hewasconfused.

Laterthatmorning,MikeandJeffapproachedAlicewhentheyfoundherunhappy.

(请参考附录一~五);主题链接;提分步骤1读原文理基本要素和2线;提分步骤2思续写情节“以旧带新”2原则(421原则——4衔接、2情线、1主题;ARE原则—action、response、emotion);提分步骤3思伏笔添细节原续更融洽

捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。;提分步骤4沿原文特点写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道)

原文语言丰富、地道,如利用短句、双连动作链(原文①②)描写人物动作;非谓语动词作状语+从句+人物神态描写(原文③);副词、形容词、介词短语作状语,描写人物情感(原文④⑤⑥);无灵主语句描写人物内心活动(原文⑦);在叙述事情经过时,利用短句+长句(含有定语从句)(原文⑧)等。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。;仿效临摹满分手写体 Handwritingalsocounts!;Version2

WhenDadsawAlicewalkingthedog,hewasconfused.Obviously,hewasnothappyaboutthis.WhenAlicecameback,DadaskedwhyshewasdoingJeff’sjobs.Alicestuttered,“I...Ijustwanttoearnalltheextrapocketmoneytobuythatfossilintheshop.”“I’msorry,Alice,I’mafraidyoucan’t.Youallhavetodothejobs—notjustyou.Thepointisthatwesharethejobs.”Dadsaid.HearingwhatDadsaid,Alicewastakenholdofbyasurgeofdisappointmentmixedwithsadness(爱丽丝既???望又难过).ShethoughtitwasunfairthatDadjustignoredherhardwork.

Laterthatmorning,MikeandJeffapproachedAlicewhentheyfoundherunhappy.Theypresentedasmallboxandurgedhertoopenit.Alicehadnoideawhatwasgoingon,butseeinghertwobrothers’eyestwinklingwitheagerness,sheopenedit.Themomentshesawwhatwasinside,Alicejumpedupwithjoy.Itwasherbrothers’extrapocketmoney,withwhichshecouldaffordoneofthefossilsshedreamedabout!Shethrewherarmsaroundherbrothers,tearswellingupinhereyes(她张开双臂拥抱两个哥哥