高中英语教学课件：(Z20)读后续写讲评.pptx

浙江省名校新高考研究联盟（Z20联盟）2020届第三次联考读后续写写作思路分析1. 确定主题：本续写主题是孩子需要父母的陪伴，而父母却忙于工作疏于顾及孩子的情感需求。故事以第一人称的视角进行叙述。讲述的是我由于工作繁忙，没有时间理会女儿需要父亲陪伴的情感渴求，最后女儿因为得不到我的陪伴大哭，女儿的哭声让我明白工作再忙也记得要匀出一点时间去陪伴孩子，孩子的成长不能缺失父母的情感陪伴和心理呵护。写作思路分析3. 续写难点：该续写的写作有两个难点：一是在第一段女儿提出叫父亲陪她到外面玩，根据第二段的开头句提示，父亲应该是拒绝了女儿的请求，女儿才大哭。要以幼儿（22-month-old）的语言的心理动态去描写，而不是一个大孩子的语气，语气要吻合年龄特征。二是父亲意识到问题后如何安慰幼小的女儿及父亲的感触。Work out possible plots in paragraph1What expectation did the girl have for her father when she ran for her father?How did she feel at the beginning?Did her father accept her beg for an outing?If not, what’s her father’s excuse for not being able to accompany her?Work out possible plots in paragraph2How did the author feel on seeing his daughter crying ?Did he realize his problem?What lesson did he learn from the incident?What will her father do later?Polished SentencesHer sob was like a needle hurting my heart.She stood next to me with her eyes glittering with expectation.My stern expression and impatient frown obviously frightened her, making her hand for mine freeze in the air.Gone was the smile on her face, and she headed for the doll without a word.Never have I seen such a gloomy expression on a childish face, which pricked my heart deeply.It dawns on me that parents company can never be emphasized too much.Polished SentencesWhat initially started as a challenge turned out to be a bonus.What I caught sight of was actually a bullet to my heart, making me feel enormously guilty. With a pile of work to do, I sat in front of the desk, turning a deaf ear to Meghans beg.Her gleaming eyes and sunny smile made me realize that it was rewarding to accompany her, even as a “fool”.Possible Appealing Ending A Narrative EndingNow, Meghan has been a mother of two babies. When I looked back to that day, I was still guilty about my rudeness at her expectation for my company. A Philosophic EndingNo matter how busy we are, dont miss the best time to accompany our children. Parents company will nourish their hopes and happiness.An Ech