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作文三点定高分 3点定高分 1. 结构清晰 一篇高分作文，必须结构清晰、布局合理—结构意义完整、框架安排合理、主题不离中心、段落详略得当。 2. 句式多变 一篇高分作文，语言上应做到句式多变、丰富多姿—长短句搭配、主动被动合理、穿插倒装强调、句间衔接紧密。 3. 出现亮点 一篇高分作文，往往还需在文中出现几个亮点—遣词准确贴切、用语形象生动、恰当运用修辞。 优化好句式 第一讲 长短句变换 一、短句变长句 受汉语思维的影响，很多考生往往会直接将脑子里的意思译成英语，而忽略句与句之间的联系，导致写出的句子无法体现英语作为“形合语言”的特点。因此，考生要注意前后句子之间是否存在联系，善于发现各简单句之间的关联，用恰当的连接词将简单句连接起来，组成地道的长句，增加文章的气势。 例1：Lies do harm to those who are being told lies. Lies do harm to those who tell them. 优化：Lies not only do harm to those who are being told lies, but also do harm to those who tell them. 例2：Teenagers are pressured by school work. Under such circumstances, they resort to smoking. But sometimes they feel a little guilty. 优化：Pressured by school work, teenagers often resort to smoking, though they feel a little guilty sometimes. 二、长句变短句 长句固然能表达出复杂缜密的思想，但如果片面追求复杂句式，反而会显得华而不实，成为表达的累赘。 写作中句子的长短应根据表达的需要，有话则长，无话则短。简洁是写作的一个重要原则，用词累赘是写作的大忌。 例1：He didn’t do the work well because of the fact that he didn’t have enough relative work experience. 优化：He didn’t do the work well for lack of experience. 例2：Perhaps they basically distrusted our capacity to judge correctly. 优化：They distrusted our judgment. 我来练练 1：The captain was a tall, thin man. He has a big mustache. He was pacing the bridge with a look of importance. 优化：The captain, a tall, thin man with a mustache, was pacing the bridge with a look of importance. 分析：三个简单句被优化为一个简单句。第一、第二句被简化为同位语。第二句简化成介词短语作定语。 我来练练 2：The grading system at our college should be abolished. The students don’t like getting grades. The instructors don’t enjoy giving grades. 优化： The grading system at our college should be abolished because neither the students nor the instructors like it. 分析：三个简单句被优化为一个复合句。后两句合成一个原因状语从句；neither…nor 连接并列主语。 我来练练 3：One reason why I prefer a student-oriented class to a teacher-oriented one is that it can make my knowledge permanent, in addition to which, it can develop my creative mind and my learning ability. 优化： I prefer a student-oriented class to a teacher-oriented one. For one