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李克斌作文满分教学材料之人物描写一 Our English Teacher 　　 ???We have a good English teacher whose name is Bruce. He comes from Britain and he is about forty years old. He is a tall and thin person, wearing a pair of glasses which makes him more like a gentleman.???He is strict with us. He often makes full preparations for his class and corrects our homework carefully. His teaching style is very unique, because he is used to encouraging all of us to think by ourselves and study on our own. The relationship between Bruce and us is harmonious. He is so kind and friendly that every student likes him and respects him deeply.???Our teacher is so excellent that we all love him very much. 李克斌评点： ??We have a good English teacher whose name is Bruce.【定语从句属于高级语法范畴，好！】 He comes from Britain and he is about forty years old. He is a tall and thin person, wearing a pair of glasses which makes him more like a gentleman.【运用了定语从句和非谓语形式，这些都是高级语法结构形式。】 【第一自然段介绍老师本人，第二自然段介绍他与我们学生的关系了。】???He is strict with us. He often makes full preparations for 【没有运用一般学生都会运用的get ready for或prepare for,这个词组属于高级词汇，好！】his class and corrects our homework carefully. His teaching style is very unique, because he is used to encouraging all of us to think by ourselves and study on our own. The relationship between Bruce and us is harmonious.【高级词汇】 He is so kind and friendly that every student likes him and respects him deeply.【so ....that....结构】???Our teacher is so excellent that we all love him very much.【首尾呼应】 、全文语言简洁 、长短句交替运用，体现节奏美 、多次用了高级语法结构 、运用了高级词汇 、段落清晰 走出中国式英语作文三大误区　 “为什么我的词汇量如此丰富却仍然写不出能让阅卷老师满意的作文？”相信不少同学都曾有过这样的疑问。对此，英语老师相楠分析指出，词汇量的多寡往往并不是一篇英语作文质量好或者坏的关键。许多同学即便很努力地去准备作文，但最终分数仍然不理想，这很可能是因为他们陷入了某种写作的误区。本期，相楠老师特为我们列举了比较常见的三种英语写作误区，希望能帮广大学生“对号入座”，并施以针对性的改进。 　　误区一：用中文思维串联英文词汇 一些同学在绞尽脑汁也写不出英语作文的情况下，会先按照题目写一个中文稿出来，然后再借助电子辞典翻译出一篇所谓的英语作文。还有一些同学习惯性地用中文的表达方式来写英语作文。这就造成了所谓的中国式英语作文。在这样的作文里，我们常常读到以下这类用中文的语法和英语单词拼凑出来的句子：“When Iwas a child,my parentsvery loveme。”(正确的表达：When Iwas achild,my parents lovedme verymuch。)“Thesuperm