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名校高分满分作文借鉴 话题一：旅游／风俗习惯 外国友人来信咨询在北京要注意的风土人情和文化习俗，请你写一封 回信介绍并提醒他在北京需要注意的风俗习惯并如何得体的表现，包括打 招呼、餐桌礼仪及家庭法则。 提示词：Greeting table manners home rules 范文一：（101 中学 15 分） How to behave when we are travelling Nowadays, more and more Chinese people prefer to travel around the world. They bring the Chinese traditional virtue abroad, but at the same time, some of their behaviors really damage Chinese reputation in the world. It’s necessary for us to learn how to behave when we’re travelling. Above all, we’re supposed to be civilized while visiting famous places. Instead of doing boring things like cutting names on historical sites, listening to the guides are encouraged in order to show our respect for the country. It’s also a bad behavior to take photos secretly without permission. In the restaurant, it’s impolite to talk with friends loudly, which may annoy others. Why don’t we learn some polite words in foreign language and try to communicate with local people? This 1 really helps us to have a better understanding about different cultures. Why are we supposed to do so? Good manners make our tour more comfortable and pleasant. As we all want to have a harmonious environment to live in, polite behaviors leave a good impression on everybody’s heart. Our courses are symbol of China, and each Chinese should pay his own effort. （189 字） 点评： 整体看，作者运用长句的能力很 ，而且文章的组织性很 ，内容很充 实，全篇无语法错误再加上高级的长句运用，当然必须满分。 1. 开篇内容很充实，有标黄长句，用词地道，搭配贴切，给评委很 好的第一印象。 2. 中间标红句子运用 without 这一小词非常地道。 3. 结尾部分也有标黄长句，再次形成前后呼应，开头结尾都有高级 长句坐镇，所以文章从内容从形式上都是一流水准。 实用借鉴词组及句型： 1. bring the Chinese traditional virtue abroad 把中国美德带到国外 2. damage Chinese rep