基础英语写作—句子写作句子有效性.pptx

Effective Sentences《英语写作》 Q: What are the principles for effective sentences? CONTENTSUnityCoherenceEmphasisConcisenesariety05 1Unity Part 1:Unity1. Unity 一致性、完整性A unified sentence expresses a single complete thought. It does not contain ideas that are not closely related, nor does it express a thought that is not complete by itself. Part 1:UnityOriginal: Born in a small town in South China in the early 50s, he grew up to be a famous musician.Revised : He was born in a small town in South China in the early 50s. In his childhood he was interested in singing. Later he entered a music school, and in the 70s he became a famous musician.（Not closely related ideas） Part 1:UnityOriginal: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets.Revised : Du Fu was one of the greatest poets of the Tang dynasty of China. （Incomplete idea） 2Coherence Part 2:Coherence2. Coherence 连贯性Coherence means clear and reasonable connection between parts. A sentence is coherent when its words and parts are properly connected and their relationships unmistakably clear. To achieve cohesion, the following techniques can be adopted: RepetitionSynonymyPronoun referenceEnumerationParallelismTransitions… Part 2:CoherenceA sentence is not coherent if it has: Faulty parallelism 平行结构缺陷Pronoun with ambiguous reference 代词指代不清Faulty shift (in person and number, in voice, tense and mood) 人称、数、语态、时态或语气上混乱Dangling or misplaced modifiers “悬垂”修饰语或修饰语位置不当 Part 2:CoherencePractice: Find out the faulty parts in the following sentences and try to revise them. A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds.2. She told my sister that she was wrong.3. She bought several picture books and put them into her bag, which she intended to give to her children.4. Looking out of the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach.5. Those who wish to take Linguistics are expected to sign his name on this sheet of paper. Part 2:Coherence1. A man is judged not only by what he says but als